Talk:Joey

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Improvements needed

The biography section of this article needs to be divided into different sections. A good rule-of-thumb is that if the body is greater than four paragraphs, it should start being divided into sections. Otherwise, it is written too hastily and reads more like listing off action-after-action in the book without being rendered into a proper summary to truly explain to readers clearly, concisely, and naturally the events in this individual's life. On a side-note, it overuses the word says (and its inflections), which should be used sparingly since it's the most informal word to mean speaking, and there are usually better ways to describe a character saying something to someone. Sol Pacificus^(Cyfiero) 05:49, 6 January 2023 (UTC)