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[[File:Pigeoncoopapp.png|center|300px]] '''The following page is an apprentice assignment page, which acts as a connection between the Apprentice, [[User:The Forgotten Fragment|The Forgotten Fragment]] , and their Mentor, [[User:Nostalgia AC|Nostalgia AC]] . It exists as an external talk page, aimed at dealing with all aspects of the apprenticeship. Only the above mentioned users and the [[Assassin's_Creed_Wiki:Staff|staff]] have permission to converse here. Any outside interference will result in an immediate ban from the wiki.''' | [[File:Pigeoncoopapp.png|center|300px]] '''The following page is an apprentice assignment page, which acts as a connection between the Apprentice, [[User:The Forgotten Fragment|The Forgotten Fragment]] , and their Mentor, [[User:Nostalgia AC|Nostalgia AC]] . It exists as an external talk page, aimed at dealing with all aspects of the apprenticeship. Only the above mentioned users and the [[Assassin's_Creed_Wiki:Staff|staff]] have permission to converse here. Any outside interference will result in an immediate ban from the wiki.''' | ||
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Assignment 1= | !Introductory comments | ||
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Hey Frag, glad to be working with you. Congrats on passing the interview, now let's get to work. First off, if you ever have any questions about an assignment or anything, please ask me as I'm happy to answer them so don't feel uncomfortable asking. Unfortunately, I am away this weekend with my family and will not have much access to the wiki or the IRC, so there's no assignment for now, but I'll have one for you when I return on Sunday evening. In the meantime, keep editing around the wiki and everything. Also, I updated your userpage with the appropriate Apprentice templates and userboxes so feel free to move those around as you like. --[[User:Nostalgia AC|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 14:04, March 22, 2013 (UTC) | |||
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==Assignment 1: [[Paul Revere]] revamp== | |||
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For your first assignment, I would like you to revamp [[Paul Revere]]. From what I saw on a quick read-through, the article needs: | For your first assignment, I would like you to revamp [[Paul Revere]]. From what I saw on a quick read-through, the article needs: | ||
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Please use that list as a guide, not as a prompt; if there are things not mentioned that need fixing, then fix them. If you are having trouble, leave me a message here detailing your issue, or send me a message on the IRC. Otherwise, post here with a summary of the work you've done once you're finished. Some helpful links are [[The Midnight Ride (memory)]] for info and images, and [[Israel Putnam]] for help with spacing, quotes, and extent of info. Good luck, Apprentice. --[[User:Nostalgia AC|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 23:26, March 24, 2013 (UTC) | Please use that list as a guide, not as a prompt; if there are things not mentioned that need fixing, then fix them. If you are having trouble, leave me a message here detailing your issue, or send me a message on the IRC. Otherwise, post here with a summary of the work you've done once you're finished. Some helpful links are [[The Midnight Ride (memory)]] for info and images, and [[Israel Putnam]] for help with spacing, quotes, and extent of info. Good luck, Apprentice. --[[User:Nostalgia AC|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 23:26, March 24, 2013 (UTC) | ||
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===Summary=== | |||
I completed all of the suggested bullets (using them as a prompt) and I also expanded information. I had a little bit of trouble finding quotes for Revere, due to his brief appearance in AC...so I took most from the Midnight Ride. I added a legacy section, a trivia, and expanded the gallery. I believe I have completed the revamp, and I have now nothing more to add to the article without being repetitive. (I think I did this wrong lol) --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment]] | |||
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Nah, your summary was fine. Here are my lessons after reading the article: | |||
*Don't repeat links; only add them the first time they are mentioned in the article. Also, make sure your links are up-to-date and not redirects. | |||
*Use a constant name throughout the article. Sometimes you used "Paul" and other times you used "Revere." Keep it simple and use one throughout :P. | |||
*Add periods to the end of all quotes. Try to shorten them too if possible and as long as it doesn't damage the focus of the quote. | |||
*Remove the apprentice and revamp templates once you're done an assignment like this. | |||
Well, those are just my main observations. You can check [http://assassinscreed.wikia.com/wiki/Paul_Revere?diff=449493&oldid=449178 my edit] to see all the changes I made and feel free to ask me if you're unsure why I did any of them. Overall though, the article looks good. All the expansion you did is awesome and the rewording you did is a lot better than before. Your work has earned you a promotion, and keep my comments in mind for the future. I'll have another assignment up for you later tonight or tomorrow. --[[User:Nostalgia AC|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 16:47, March 30, 2013 (UTC) | |||
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Revision as of 18:47, 30 March 2013
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Hey Frag, glad to be working with you. Congrats on passing the interview, now let's get to work. First off, if you ever have any questions about an assignment or anything, please ask me as I'm happy to answer them so don't feel uncomfortable asking. Unfortunately, I am away this weekend with my family and will not have much access to the wiki or the IRC, so there's no assignment for now, but I'll have one for you when I return on Sunday evening. In the meantime, keep editing around the wiki and everything. Also, I updated your userpage with the appropriate Apprentice templates and userboxes so feel free to move those around as you like. --NOSTALGIA TALK 14:04, March 22, 2013 (UTC) |
Assignment 1: Paul Revere revamp
Details
For your first assignment, I would like you to revamp Paul Revere. From what I saw on a quick read-through, the article needs:
- More formal wording
- Expansion (Check his database entry in AC3 and make sure everything is there. Also, check Wikipedia for additional info.)
- Spacing in the history section
- More images in the gallery and the article itself
- Opening quotes at the beginning of the whole article or at the beginning of any biographical sub-sections, if fitting.
Please use that list as a guide, not as a prompt; if there are things not mentioned that need fixing, then fix them. If you are having trouble, leave me a message here detailing your issue, or send me a message on the IRC. Otherwise, post here with a summary of the work you've done once you're finished. Some helpful links are The Midnight Ride (memory) for info and images, and Israel Putnam for help with spacing, quotes, and extent of info. Good luck, Apprentice. --NOSTALGIA TALK 23:26, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
Summary
I completed all of the suggested bullets (using them as a prompt) and I also expanded information. I had a little bit of trouble finding quotes for Revere, due to his brief appearance in AC...so I took most from the Midnight Ride. I added a legacy section, a trivia, and expanded the gallery. I believe I have completed the revamp, and I have now nothing more to add to the article without being repetitive. (I think I did this wrong lol) --User:The Forgotten Fragment
Final comments
Nah, your summary was fine. Here are my lessons after reading the article:
- Don't repeat links; only add them the first time they are mentioned in the article. Also, make sure your links are up-to-date and not redirects.
- Use a constant name throughout the article. Sometimes you used "Paul" and other times you used "Revere." Keep it simple and use one throughout :P.
- Add periods to the end of all quotes. Try to shorten them too if possible and as long as it doesn't damage the focus of the quote.
- Remove the apprentice and revamp templates once you're done an assignment like this.
Well, those are just my main observations. You can check my edit to see all the changes I made and feel free to ask me if you're unsure why I did any of them. Overall though, the article looks good. All the expansion you did is awesome and the rewording you did is a lot better than before. Your work has earned you a promotion, and keep my comments in mind for the future. I'll have another assignment up for you later tonight or tomorrow. --NOSTALGIA TALK 16:47, March 30, 2013 (UTC)