Assassin's Creed Wiki:Apprentices/Piero.schiavone1994/PigeonCoop

The following page is an apprentice assignment page, which acts as a connection between the Apprentice, Piero.schiavone1994, and their Mentor, Amnestyyy . It exists as an external talk page, aimed at dealing with all aspects of the apprenticeship. Only the above mentioned users and the staff have permission to converse here. Any outside interference will result in an immediate ban from the wiki.

My little introduction speech

Well, there we are: the pigeon coop. This is where all the apprenticeship-stuff will be discussed and where you will find your assignments and evaluations. I think it should all be quite self-evident. One little note: I often make distinctions between major and minor assignments - major being your main task, minor assignments being projects "on the side."

Project 1: Bombs

Alright then. For your first project, you'll be revamping the Bombs article. And, since it's your first assignment, I'll even give you an outline of the work that needs to be done. Hopefully, this will make you more familiar with the Manual of Style, and the finer subtleties of editing.

• Some of the quotes are not very inspired and could perhaps be changed with more suitable ones. Also, adding quotes to sections that do not have quotes yet.
• Some of the information currently in the trivia section is important enough to be incorporated in the main body of the article.
• There is a template stating not all Syndicate information is present. Try and find out what information is missing and make sure it is added.
• Also, see if there are any other important instances of bombs being used in games that are not yet in the article. If so, add these too.
• The sourcing can do with a bit of touching up. I noticed that one of the references was broken, and some of others can probably be touched up as well.
• Perhaps most importantly, the sections need altering. Right now, it has 'smoke boms + history' and 'explosive bombs + history.' Try to make it just one history section, like most of our other articles, and use subheaders where you think necessary.

That should be a good start. If you have any questions, let me know here, on my talk page, or on the IRC. You can also keep my apprised of your progress here.

Progress report + questions

• Leave your comments and questions in this section :) --Amnestyyy (Contact me!) <helper /> 16:14, February 4, 2017 (UTC)
• I've just read about my assigned task and I'll soon start my work. :)--Piero.schiavone1994 (talk) 20:34, February 5, 2017 (UTC)
• I've almost finished the unified "History" section, will just need to add info from Unity and Syndicate. On this regard, I'm pretty sure the missing information from Syndicate probably just is about Fear bombs used by Evie and Jack in the Jack the Ripper campaign, but I'll still strive to flesh it out even more. I've added a couple of missing instances of bomb usage which had been either left out, or listed in the Trivia section, which I've decently trimmed. I'd like to finish what I've started, then I could possibly write a section about Types (of bombs, like, the most interesting kinds from each installment) and / or Tactics (mirroring the previous division between Smoke bombs and Explosive bombs); and also add new quotes. I hope I'm doing well and am not being too slow. --Piero.schiavone1994 (talk) 23:11, February 10, 2017 (UTC)
• The trivia section does look a lot better now, so good job on that. The general layout of the article has also been improved nicely, with a concise but accurate history section to boot. Don't worry about the time needed to complete the assignment: there's no time-limit, and doing a good job is more important than doing a quick one. One little thing: I noticed you making quite a few edits to the page in short succession - try to use the preview button to minimise cluttering of the activity feed from here on out. Amnestyyy (Contact me!) <helper /> 16:19, February 13, 2017 (UTC)

Minor task 1

I'll also give you a minor task straight off the bat. Go to the articles featuring the revamp template. Pick one of these, go over the article and see what needs to be done to make it better. Leave a list here, in the same style as I've left for you above. After I've gone over your to-do list and approved it, you'll revamp this page as well. Good luck!

I think the Carnevale article would be a nice playground. I personally think:

• The article could be improved by adding a synopsis of the events of that particular Carnevale of 1486 (as it had already been suggested on the talk page), like Ezio partaking in the games etc. etc.;
• Then, pictures taken from the Memories articles would be nice, detailing the events of the Carnevale;
• Some general information about Carnevale (especially the Carnevale di Venezia) could be moved either in the lede or in the Trivia.

Progress report + questions

• Alright, sounds good. A few tips to keep in mind: I agree that the events of the Carnevale in 1486 should be more elaborately described in the article. That being said, keep in mind that the article is about Carnevale, not about Ezio, or his attempt on Barbarigo's life. You're free to describe it, but don't go into too much detail. Also, the trivia has a mention of the Cristina memory from Brotherhood - try to work this into the main body of the article in an in-universe way. Amnestyyy (Contact me!) <helper /> 16:19, February 13, 2017 (UTC)