Assassin's Creed Wiki:Apprentices/The Forgotten Fragment/PigeonCoop - Revision history

imported>Stormbeast: /* Comments */

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	Ya, so due to school and other activities, this new assignment may take a bit longer for me to complete, but I shall hopefully be working on it bit by bit soon. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 03:12, October 4, 2013 (UTC)		Ya, so due to school and other activities, this new assignment may take a bit longer for me to complete, but I shall hopefully be working on it bit by bit soon. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 03:12, October 4, 2013 (UTC)
			:No worries, Frag. Whenever you can get around to it. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 03:15, October 4, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>The Forgotten Fragment at 03:12, 4 October 2013

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			Ya, so due to school and other activities, this new assignment may take a bit longer for me to complete, but I shall hopefully be working on it bit by bit soon. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 03:12, October 4, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>Stormbeast at 18:41, 15 September 2013

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 All-in-all, a job well done, worthy of a promotion. Your new tasks will be assigned after we have talked. You know where to find me if you have any questions. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 04:23, September 10, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>Stormbeast at 04:23, 10 September 2013

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	===Summary===		===Summary===


	I completed all of the suggested bullets (using them as a prompt) and I also expanded information. I had a little bit of trouble finding quotes for Revere, due to his brief appearance in AC...so I took most from the Midnight Ride. I added a legacy section, a trivia, and expanded the gallery. I believe I have completed the revamp, and I have now nothing more to add to the article without being repetitive. (I think I did this wrong lol) --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment]]		I completed all of the suggested bullets (using them as a prompt) and I also expanded information. I had a little bit of trouble finding quotes for Revere, due to his brief appearance in AC...so I took most from the Midnight Ride. I added a legacy section, a trivia, and expanded the gallery. I believe I have completed the revamp, and I have now nothing more to add to the article without being repetitive. (I think I did this wrong lol) --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment]]

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	Nah, your summary was fine. Here are my lessons after reading the article:		Nah, your summary was fine. Here are my lessons after reading the article:
	*Don't repeat links; only add them the first time they are mentioned in the article. Also, make sure your links are up-to-date and not redirects.		*Don't repeat links; only add them the first time they are mentioned in the article. Also, make sure your links are up-to-date and not redirects.
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	Now that you've learned the basics of a revamp, we're going to turn to the topic of extent of information, as I like to call it. This assignment has 2 parts, both of which are detailed below, and the basic idea is for you to develop an understanding of how much info a page needs, how much info is too much, and how much info is too little.		Now that you've learned the basics of a revamp, we're going to turn to the topic of extent of information, as I like to call it. This assignment has 2 parts, both of which are detailed below, and the basic idea is for you to develop an understanding of how much info a page needs, how much info is too much, and how much info is too little.

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	Expanded the best I could without focusing TOO much on Connor (seemed to be an issue for me). But regardless I think all needed information is there. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 00:05, September 2, 2013 (UTC)		Expanded the best I could without focusing TOO much on Connor (seemed to be an issue for me). But regardless I think all needed information is there. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 00:05, September 2, 2013 (UTC)

	====Comments====		====Comments====
	*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)		*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)
	*No rush, Frag. Hope nothing's too serious :/ {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 23:47, August 3, 2013 (UTC)		*No rush, Frag. Hope nothing's too serious :/ {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 23:47, August 3, 2013 (UTC)
			*After finally having the time to review your assignment, I'd say you did a good job. Don't let Slate's edit discourage you; he's always been a master of wordiness. However, my words of wisdom:
			#As Nos mentioned: keep focusing on your links. I noticed a duplicate link, as well as a couple redirects.
			#As Nesty mentioned: check your proofreading for spelling and grammatical errors.
			#Avoid the term ''Mohawk'' whenever possible.
			#Avoid ''and so'', as well as biased writing (luckily).

			All-in-all, a job well done, worthy of a promotion. Your new tasks will be assigned after we have talked. You know where to find me if you have any questions. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 04:23, September 10, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>The Forgotten Fragment: Signing, and done :>

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Signing, and done :>

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	Welp, I attempted to cut down on useless information while still keeping the original form. I also got rid of extra information that really wasn't very relevant, and more or less repeated what other passages had already stated. I did change up the language a bit, but I don't think that affected the article too much.		Welp, I attempted to cut down on useless information while still keeping the original form. I also got rid of extra information that really wasn't very relevant, and more or less repeated what other passages had already stated. I did change up the language a bit, but I don't think that affected the article too much. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 00:05, September 2, 2013 (UTC)

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	~~Recovered fully, and should~~ be ~~posting soon :~~) --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 02:13, ~~August 10~~, 2013 (UTC)		Expanded the best I could without focusing TOO much on Connor (seemed to be an issue for me). But regardless I think all needed information is there. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 00:05, September 2, 2013 (UTC)
	====Comments====		====Comments====
	*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)		*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)
	*No rush, Frag. Hope nothing's too serious :/ {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 23:47, August 3, 2013 (UTC)		*No rush, Frag. Hope nothing's too serious :/ {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 23:47, August 3, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>The Forgotten Fragment at 02:13, 10 August 2013

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	~~Ya...so I am currently recovering from surgery~~, ~~so this assignment wont~~ be ~~posted for a couple days, just a heads up storm~~ --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 21:21, August 3, 2013 (UTC)		Recovered fully, and should be posting soon :) --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 02:13, August 10, 2013 (UTC)
	====Comments====		====Comments====
	*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)		*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)
	*No rush, Frag. Hope nothing's too serious :/ {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 23:47, August 3, 2013 (UTC)		*No rush, Frag. Hope nothing's too serious :/ {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 23:47, August 3, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>Stormbeast: /* Comments */

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	*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)		*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)
			*No rush, Frag. Hope nothing's too serious :/ {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 23:47, August 3, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>The Forgotten Fragment at 21:21, 3 August 2013

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			Ya...so I am currently recovering from surgery, so this assignment wont be posted for a couple days, just a heads up storm --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 21:21, August 3, 2013 (UTC)
	====Comments====		====Comments====
	*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)		*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>Stormbeast at 02:08, 31 July 2013

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	Keep my previous comments in mind and make sure to proofread to get rid of grammar, spelling, and punctuation mistakes. Leave a message in the comments section if you're having trouble, or contact me on the IRC. Otherwise, post summaries in each summary section once you're done. Note that there is no order or time limit to these assignments, so feel free to do them as you choose. Good luck. --[[User:Nostalgia AC\|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC\|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 23:10, March 30, 2013 (UTC)		Keep my previous comments in mind and make sure to proofread to get rid of grammar, spelling, and punctuation mistakes. Leave a message in the comments section if you're having trouble, or contact me on the IRC. Otherwise, post summaries in each summary section once you're done. Note that there is no order or time limit to these assignments, so feel free to do them as you choose. Good luck. --[[User:Nostalgia AC\|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC\|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 23:10, March 30, 2013 (UTC)

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	:Frag, I don't mean to come off as a dick but it's been 2 weeks since I gave the assignment and you have not posted any progress. I've seen you editing actively around the wiki, which is great, but you should know that your assignments are a priority above other editing work. I'm fine with you editing on Microsoft Word or another offline source, and I understand if you have real-life commitments that prevent you from working on it, but you have to tell me so that I know. --[[User:Nostalgia AC\|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC\|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 19:03, April 13, 2013 (UTC)		:Frag, I don't mean to come off as a dick but it's been 2 weeks since I gave the assignment and you have not posted any progress. I've seen you editing actively around the wiki, which is great, but you should know that your assignments are a priority above other editing work. I'm fine with you editing on Microsoft Word or another offline source, and I understand if you have real-life commitments that prevent you from working on it, but you have to tell me so that I know. --[[User:Nostalgia AC\|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC\|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 19:03, April 13, 2013 (UTC)

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	:Thanks Nos, he is in the hospital right now, but he is overall ok. Ill try and post these assignments as soon as I get home. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 02:51, April 17, 2013 (UTC)		:Thanks Nos, he is in the hospital right now, but he is overall ok. Ill try and post these assignments as soon as I get home. --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|<span style="font-family:Copperplate Gothic Bold;font-size:16px;color:#A3E3ED;">Fragment</span>]] [[User talk:The Forgotten Fragment\|<sup><span style="font-family:times new roman;color:orange;">-Animus-</span></sup>]] 02:51, April 17, 2013 (UTC)
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	===Part I: [[Edward Braddock]]===		===Part I: [[Edward Braddock]]===
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			*I look forward to seeing your work, and will have more work for you when you finish this one. {{User:Stormbeast/sig}} 02:08, July 31, 2013 (UTC)
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imported>Amnestyyy at 18:44, 24 July 2013

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	[[File:Pigeoncoopapp.png\|center\|300px]] '''The following page is an apprentice assignment page, which acts as a connection between the Apprentice, [[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|The Forgotten Fragment]] , and their Mentor, [[User:~~Nostalgia AC~~\|~~Nostalgia AC~~]] . It exists as an external talk page, aimed at dealing with all aspects of the apprenticeship. Only the above mentioned users and the [[Assassin's_Creed_Wiki:Staff\|staff]] have permission to converse here. Any outside interference will result in an immediate ban from the wiki.'''		[[File:Pigeoncoopapp.png\|center\|300px]] '''The following page is an apprentice assignment page, which acts as a connection between the Apprentice, [[User:The Forgotten Fragment\|The Forgotten Fragment]] , and their Mentor, [[User:Stormbeast\|Stormbeast]]. It exists as an external talk page, aimed at dealing with all aspects of the apprenticeship. Only the above mentioned users and the [[Assassin's_Creed_Wiki:Staff\|staff]] have permission to converse here. Any outside interference will result in an immediate ban from the wiki.'''

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	*Opening quotes at the beginning of the whole article or at the beginning of any biographical sub-sections, if fitting.		*Opening quotes at the beginning of the whole article or at the beginning of any biographical sub-sections, if fitting.



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	===Summary===		===Summary===


	I completed all of the suggested bullets (using them as a prompt) and I also expanded information. I had a little bit of trouble finding quotes for Revere, due to his brief appearance in AC...so I took most from the Midnight Ride. I added a legacy section, a trivia, and expanded the gallery. I believe I have completed the revamp, and I have now nothing more to add to the article without being repetitive. (I think I did this wrong lol) --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment]]		I completed all of the suggested bullets (using them as a prompt) and I also expanded information. I had a little bit of trouble finding quotes for Revere, due to his brief appearance in AC...so I took most from the Midnight Ride. I added a legacy section, a trivia, and expanded the gallery. I believe I have completed the revamp, and I have now nothing more to add to the article without being repetitive. (I think I did this wrong lol) --[[User:The Forgotten Fragment]]

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	Nah, your summary was fine. Here are my lessons after reading the article:		Nah, your summary was fine. Here are my lessons after reading the article:
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	*Try to shorten quotes if possible and as long as it doesn't damage the focus of the quote.		*Try to shorten quotes if possible and as long as it doesn't damage the focus of the quote.
	*Remove the apprentice and revamp templates once you're done an assignment like this.		*Remove the apprentice and revamp templates once you're done an assignment like this.


	Well, those are just my main observations. You can check [http://assassinscreed.wikia.com/wiki/Paul_Revere?diff=449493&oldid=449178 my edit] to see all the changes I made and feel free to ask me if you're unsure why I did any of them. Overall though, the article looks good. All the expansion you did is awesome and the rewording you did is a lot better than before. Your work has earned you a promotion, and keep my comments in mind for the future. I'll have another assignment up for you later tonight or tomorrow. --[[User:Nostalgia AC\|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC\|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 16:47, March 30, 2013 (UTC)		Well, those are just my main observations. You can check [http://assassinscreed.wikia.com/wiki/Paul_Revere?diff=449493&oldid=449178 my edit] to see all the changes I made and feel free to ask me if you're unsure why I did any of them. Overall though, the article looks good. All the expansion you did is awesome and the rewording you did is a lot better than before. Your work has earned you a promotion, and keep my comments in mind for the future. I'll have another assignment up for you later tonight or tomorrow. --[[User:Nostalgia AC\|<span style="font-family:futura;font-size:19px;color:#566D7E;">'''NOSTALGIA'''</span>]] [[User_Talk:Nostalgia AC\|<sup><span style="font-family:futura;color:#FFFFFF;">TALK</span></sup>]] 16:47, March 30, 2013 (UTC)